There is clothes such as shirts and shorts mixed in with stuffed toys and shoes. You have got great vocabulary, I didn't really see anything that wrong. Some of its correct. You spelt it as color (the American way). My bedside table is black with sticker brands covering them. My desk is a white desk and is placed against the back of the room to give a feeling that the colors are spaced out. Your Bedroom Ideas are very elaborated and the descriptive part of it has been written very well. I didn't notice any capital mistakes throughout your writing. It was a good description of your room I rely could visualized what the room looked like. the room was as fresh as morning air. In my room I have lots of draws and places to put stuff but hardly use any of because most stuff is on the floor. When you walk into my room youll see my bed in the far right corner. My bedroom is a medium size which I think fits everything in nicely. Good descriptive words & keen to help you clean & rearrange anytime. I really enjoy your description jake I can visualize your bedroom very well. Brookes Bedroom Description (My hands feel very cold.) it has a touch of my personality, and stays clean most of the time. I would give you a rubric 5. Above my bed are two medium sized paintings, one of an owl and the other of a tree. And it sits on the other side of the room! I spend probably 12 hours a day on my bed so it needs to be nice and comfy luckily it is. The layout of the room has a facing direction pointing at the north east with side on single beds one near the huge closets and one across near the sliding windows for the sun to enter. Under my bed I throw just about everything down there like sport gear and clothes I can't be bothered putting away. The rooms style of the room is old rugged modern and not really cared about but that's what makes it mine. You might say this if you felt like you learned a lot during your summer break from school. Lv 7. In my personal opinion I do love the way my bedroom looks and how it has a theme and a great view! The layout of my bedroom has my bed in the middle and then there is a gap between my brown clothes draw and my bed. MY BEDROOM. You could work on the adjectives but otherwise very good. My wardrobe the mirror is all dusty with had prints all over it and inside it has rubbish, all my rugby gear, ski gear and more clothes. People who love the outdoors might feel most at ease and happy when theyre outside in the forest. This grants me access outside whenever I need it, especially if it's for a little alone time. Being next to it gives me a warm feeling. My bed is the main accessory in my room because it is in the center of the room up against my feature wall. I would like my room to be neater and tidyer so my mother would not be nagging at me all the time saying pick up your clothes Bree or make your bed Bree. The style of my room is a beach theme. Now lets talk about the mess. In my room there can sometimes be a lot of space when my room is clean but when it is untidy there is literally not space because of the stuff on the floor. I think that this is a fine piece of writing. Over all in my room I have lots of wall decorations that are very creative. Style of the room is mine and only mine if anyone can match my unique style they all mash up together to make the bedroom mine. 4+, Oh my goodness Jake! My wardrobe layout has all my shoes which i only have two pairs, hanging up are all my nice clothes. So overall i think my bedroom is a wonderful place to relax and do my own thing so I wouldn't change a thing about it. Great writing Shadyn really liked it, I still ant that ps4 of yours though! Well my room is very messy I hate tidying my room I alway have clothes all over the floor. The layout, accessories, colours and the style. My Home is my Castle. All I can see is clothes all over my floor dirty plates on my bed side table. Above my bed, facing a window on the opposite side of the room, is a TV. Soft light brown that's how I describe my carpet it is really soft to walk on and gives you that welcome feeling. You describe it well. My bedroom is just the way I like it. I like my bedroom theme it fits my personality. The material on this site can not be reproduced, distributed, transmitted, cached or otherwise used, except with prior written permission of Multiply. Very well written i liked the word choices and how you alborated on it, there was nothing that I could find that needed work i would give you a 4+, Very good way of describing room. My curtains are white with a see through sort of material over top. Here are some topics Im going to talk about, firstly the layout of my room, secondly the lighting then the accessories and lastly the furniture. The bed is positioned next to a wall-sized sliding door. Nishmat Kol Chai In Russian, Above my bed there are another three picture that my mum had embroidered for us when we were little. And I would try and keep it a bit more tidy! My pillows and duvet are very colourful but you can hardly ever see what they look like because I almost never make my bed so unless someone else does all the duvets and pillows have been thrown on the floor or are inside out. Most times I just laugh because sometimes he is just plain old stupid. Time for the most exciting part of it, the bed. Lastly, my favorite item in my room would be my lovely old fashioned jewelry box. I think some of your sentences were a bit long and could have benefited from some more commas, but I think your punctuation has improved. Along one wall has the three dressers. I dont ever think of changing my carpet but if I was then I would just throw heaps of pillows down onto my floor, that would be very comfy. My bed is normally scorching hot from the electric blanket. My room has a fresh air smell and, in the morning you can hear the birds chirping outside, if you were to walk into my room it would be clean and tidy just the way I like it. It was a great story. Mabelles Bedroom Description The only thing thats in there is a couple of dresses I never wear and some picture frames that my mum forgot to take out when she moved rooms. Look at the picture and make sentences to describe the bedroom. My duchess is across from my bed flat against the left hand wall. I bet your glad to get out of your old room. It also has another mattress underneath that has wheels on it. My theme, my theme of my room is based on a sporty kind of theme. Ok I have got a lot of things in my room but some of my favorites are the accessories. For next time you could use more vocabulary and try not to repeat words. I also have 2 paintings on the wall, I used to have 3 but my nephew ripped one off so it is lying in my stuffed toy pit now. Use the planning sheet in your English book and the list of NOUNS and ADJECTIVES to assist you. The room feels incredibly spacious because of the high ceilings, fitted with chandelier-like light fixtures The walls are not just straight and boring as they have little alcoves that are useful for tucking away furniture neatly. Johns suggestion was just a Band-Aid for the problem. I have a blue stegosaurus lampshade, a monitor and PS4, a TV and even a bulletin board. I have fairy lights that are pink and gold, my desk is blue while my chair is a lime green. Well structured paragraphs and a few funny jokes too. Apart from blue the other colour that makes a common appearance is white as my walls, bedside table and shelves are white washed. We have a old square tv holder thingy that I used to swing on until I put a hole in the wall, its still there. Behind the white table theres a cupboard that I dont use instead I put my clothes in drawers in front of my bed. My bed is in the corner of my room and is out of the way so you don't have to walk around it. The simplest way to make a metaphor is to use this pattern: First noun + to be verb + a/an + second noun She is an angel. People are sliding down the stairs, someone has a toy train set out, and someone else is playing with dolls on the front step. But it could be neater and all the belongings could be organised. Probably you will see my bed first it's right under my window right in the center in my room. Is your bedroom like mine dirty and smelly. It may be the view of the mountain you see out my window or maybe the blue colour scheme or maybe even all the photographs on my crisp white walls. Over all I thought it was great with little mistakes. Your spelling was mostly correct there were just a few words like duvet. The colours in my room are bright with my duvet which is mixed with bright light colour then there is my light blue curtains hanging by a Dark aqua chair. Personally would like a orange feature wall in my bedroom but when you're renting a house you have to have permission to do so. 2. I think you edited your writing well ,I could only find one spelling mistake! Cleanliness, my room is not what you call clean my clothes from school lying on my bed jerseys not been hung up because I'm to lazy, my bed all messed up because I never make it, but some things aren't all bad like the way I have set up stuff that makes it look really cool and neat. I liked the way that you used the senses to give a more detailed effect about your bedroom. It's a very accurate description and well written but the mess is very understated! I ventured into my room, with the sunshine streaming in. When I walk into my bedroom, it instantly feels as though I am in my own, private space. The theme is pretty bare with a white paint job on the wall and across with chandeliers with lights that can be dimmed or brightened. Im going to tell you four things about my room, the layout, accessories, colours and finally the style of the room. I have many wall decorations in my room ranging from many colours such as black, red, white, green, blue, pink and yellow. They are all my floor and desks. In conclusion I love my room as it has a great view, is a good size, my bed is amazingly comfy and the colours are awesome. you could add some more descriptive words, Angus your punctuation was good but your spelling had a couple of 'i's in stead of a I. As the sun beamed into my bedroom, one of my signs began to glisten and reflect the light that was coming through the window. Across from that is an immense window, and finally, a built in wardrobe, containing various unfolded garments. Although there are many flaws in my room, Im still tolerating them. My bedroom, is a wonderful room to hangout in. At the foot of my bed there is a built in wardrobe with lots of clothes and at the foot of my sisters bed theres the entrance to the room and the door to the en suite. I like this description of your bed room. My pillow has different coloured stripes on it and it is very soft and comfy. MY BEDROOM Sometimes I come home and I see the floor for once because my Mum hates the mess I make in the room. As an Amazon Associate I Earn from Qualifying Purchases. Over all I think she has done very good. Adjectives can describe the general, overall quality of the smell. The final piece of furniture is a tall drawer set, which contains five drawers worth of clothing. People who work from home might have a big computer setup with large monitors, webcams, and microphones. great work i love that you did good punctuation and it was a good story. It is mostly a cool breeze that feels like the ocean air. The furniture in my room fits nicely with my double bed in the corner by my door, my bedside table beside that, my desk in the corner beside the windows and my chair beside my wardrobe. My bedroom is a hyperbolic chamber. The cleanness room isnt the best for a girl like me, Kilt thrown on the ground along with my socks and shoes. You need to work on capital letters (eg. 3 of my walls are a plain white but the fourth one has wallpaper on it, the wall paper has a cream coloured background and has light pink coloured pineapples. Great descriptive writing Christopher, you went deep into a lot of detail about your living space and colours. My bedroom is located at the back of my house halfway down the hall. I made my bedroom the way I wanted it and set it up the way I liked it. The cushions on my bed are very soft and have a sponge texture. Sometimes you cant hear anything because Im sleeping or the sound on my ipod is turned off. Its normally just a mucked up pile of sheets and she is always nagging me to make my bed and or clean my room. I share my bedroom with my one year old brother Walter and I manage to keep it reasonably tidy. You used interesting words that I haven't heard of before. I liked how you had good ideas in your writing but you didn't have that many. TROYS BEDROOM That is exactly what it looks like. My white covered double bed sits in the middle of my spacious room. On the board there is flowers carved on them. The soft and wooly ground. You might walk through all the different scenes of people playing and say, wow, my home has become a playground today!. But your NSL would be to use a larger range of different words as you have repeated some of the good words. it is very interesting and the punctuation is really good but you stroll into your room hop in your bed and then stroll into your room again so it sought of jumped around. You used good description and your story was interesting. It stinks like moldy cheese. your paragraphs were formed well. There are special items in my bedroom that cost a lot of money and one of those accessories are my Hats . A midnight black bedside table to go with the other colours in the house and also to go with the short stack that is my other set of drawers that has felt blue and green draws. It is very plain with no rugs on it. Personally I love my bedroom. Next your eyes will settle upon my short and skinny box shelf that is as black as the night with draws both as blue as the sea and as green as the algae the resides in it. Lastly how it looks. 3, You did spell some difficult words. Next step is to read it over to correct punctuation like needed and unneeded capitals and use of commas. It lies to the left of the monitor on the desk and is covered with old homework and empty cups. The best part of my room is the furniture and layout. I think you edited the grammar well with making it make sense but there were a few spelling mistakes and no capitals for I Luckily for me I dont have much to tidy, unlike my brother. The other decoration in bedroom is my average size mirror which has lots of writing on it so I can remember what I need to do. It is a stationary calamity! Your writing paints a picture in the readers mind and leaves them feeling like they actually just physically walked around it! the spelling was great and I really enjoyed reading the of writing you worked on. Good description Annie. This answers first letter of which starts with S and can be found at the end of Y. There isnt tonnes of furniture in my bedroom but I make it work with the room I have, I had the idea of a cabin bed so that i can fit some stuff under it rather than having it crammed up somewhere else. You may see now why its so untouched. My favourite part of my room sitting next to the window is my single bed. I like the constant use of adjectives, it helps me visualise the colours. Its a 2-door car with gray rim color and custom white tires. I enjoyed reading your writing illustrates without hesitation what your room feels and looks like. Every room needs furniture to make it yours and in my room the most important piece of furniture is my bed. The layout in my room is a very practical layout and is a well organised way to have it. But that's not the only thing built in to the wall there is also a reading light that can be spun and moved around into different places, but not all my accessories are new such as the hulk that has been stuck to the window by a suction cup, that's a horrendous 6 years old! The blankets on my bed are very colourful there is a bright red, white and grey striped blanket, a soft pink one and a plain white one. I like my room because of the rugged and unique feel it gives off and all the furniture and accessories. In my room we have really ugly wall paper, it is green and white, but ugly green. I like how you have used lots of descriptive words. There was a couple of spelling mistakes though. I have a built in wardrobe that has shelves in it where I can store my belongings. One of my cushions are light pink and the other one is white. Well done. My room is VERY messy. For next time you could work on not repeating ideas in each paragraph. I have 3 words to describe my dutches brown, soft, wooden it has five drawers 2 side by side then 3 long ones below each other. Beware of the wardrobe if you go underneath it something is bound to fall on your head or all my stuff will avalanche out. With the pastel colours and gold coloured curtains, it gives the room a lot of light. What my theme is. My hands are ice. At first, I thought you were describing the ocean! For next time you could work on your punctuation (commas, full stops) and spelling. When you walk in my room you will see a white door and when you walk in the main area all the walls are white with dark furniture. However some of your paragraphs didn't make any sense. The entranceway to my room holds a flowery scene: crocheted poppies and daffodils blu-tacked to their places, accompanying a daisy-shaped doorbell. Thirdly, the colors. Does my room have a theme? You might say my bedroom is a mess but to be honest this is as tidy as you will get it. Sometimes I play music from my bluetooth speaker and my brother comes in and screams and dances along to the music. 3, Great description Hayden, you forgot to mention the constant piles of washing in it! Spot on Dylan, explained your bedroom very well. Grade rating 4, your editing was really really good i could not see anything misspell or no comma or anything so well well done. I think that you could work on adding a few more descriptive words. The paddock sometimes has sheep in it. Feedback - Overall I quite liked your writing and it's not to detailed but it has some in there and the description you used was great. In my room the cleanliness is not so good. It is a king single and it has a wooden front and back board. I liked the simple ideas of your description as they stuck to what they were made for and didn't go off topic And the last of my accessories is the bulletin board. Then your eyes are carried to my dark coloured wooden dresser underneath the back window to the left. Mabelle your spelling is great there is no misspelling or any wrong words used. But i think I saw some spelling mistakes. And now the style of my bedroom and what I love about it. The coziest of It, I'll admit my room is the coziest in the house.and that's how I like, warm covers,warm mattress and my relaxing spot. (As you can probably tell I absolutely love call of duty). Good work I don't think you need to improve. In these metaphors, two items are compared, side by side, and the meaning is clear. In my bedroom I have a big abstract photo of mountains hanging above my head. oh lick that creamy cock, Below you will understand what is important, the idea provides one of the links with an exciting site: mercy smart square. Then there's the senses - smell, sight, sound, touch. My bedroom has One build in wardrobe that has clothes towering out of it, a nice warm and comfy bed that usually is never made, One big window with an amazing view, A drawer with clothes stuffed inside, One bookshelf with books from when I was little and a big abstract mountain photo hanging above my bed. Two walls are a normal bland cream, but the other walls are a bright tropical turquoise, But it surprisingly works! I think Bridget's description of her room is fairly accurate. Around the neck itself I keep my karate belts, white, orange, yellow and purple.